For Julia

Good Afternoon everyone,

I heard that Julia was looking for some help regarding her essay and I wanted to throw some insight up here that will hopefully help you out with the final draft of your essay. To begin, I would open your essay with something other then stating that it is a sonnet. You want to lure your reader into exactly how your poem is universal and later with your thesis you will explain what literary techniques are being used to make the poem universal and how they are doing this. Your thesis is almost there, just add in how imagery is being used to create universality and it will be perfect. For paragraph one the topic sentence should introduce exactly what you are going to be talking about in the paragraph rather then saying how many lines are in the stanza. You could talk about how the father waking up early relates to the cold. also, it seems like you are talking about two topics in this paragraph (the cold and the fathers hard work), if you narrow down each subject you could split them off into their own paragraphs and be able to dive deeper into the meaning of the cold and the fathers hard work. For paragraph two i had a difficult time pinpointing exactly what this paragraph was about. Once you find out what your topic sentence will be everything after that will flow. The same thing goes for paragraph three. My final piece of advice for you is currently you have no quotes within your essay, but they really work wonders. Quotes will help to amplify your arguments and then it will make your interpretation more clear. I hope this helps you out a little! -Kayleigh